Modern utility services installed in the business centres ensure continuous, secure and reliable operations of the companies accomodated in them. Environmental-friendly and resource-saving solutions provide maximum comfort for the employees based in them and ensure minimum operational costs.
It needs help for sure...
Modern utility services installed in business centres ensure continuous, secure and reliable operations of the companies. Environmental friendly and resource saving solutions provide maximum comfort for the employees working in the business and ensure minimum operational costs.
It seems a bit too wordy, as if some were writing a legal document. I would try writing a version using the least number of words to impart the as a starting point, a couple of places to shorten it:
If some form of rental properties, I would replace: "the companies accommodated in them."
with: "tenants"
Remove "based in them" in the last sentence.
Enviromentally-friendly*
It makes no sense to me so it's probably right
